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We The Few . . .

We The Few . . .

I found an interesting web page with its content below, as various people phrase a common thought in various ways. Here’s the thought:

“I’ve done so much, with so little, for so long, that now I can do anything with nothing”

How would I put this? How about:

“We the few, who have done so much for so long with so little, now attempt the impossible — with nothing.”

I’d change “I” to “we” to broaden appeal and to appeal to power. One person is important, more people more important.  The em dash is really called forhere. You don’t want a rolling sentence to roll over a point of emphasis.

I’m still thinking about how to incorporate the “ungrateful” element in many of the sentences below. That word traces back to a complete thought by Konstantin Jireček. He said:

“We, the unwilling, led by the unknowing, are doing the impossible for the ungrateful. We have done so much, for so long, with so little, we are now qualified to do anything with nothing.”

Hmm. Maybe:

“We, the poorly led and thankless, who have done so much for so long with so little, now attempt the impossible — with nothing.”

Better? How would you rewrite this? Please leave your sentence in the comment box.

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From: http://www.anvari.org/fortune/Miscellaneous_Collections/148676_ive-done-so-much-with-so-little-for-so-long-that-now-i-can-do-anything-with-nothing.html

Variations of this thought: I’ve done so much, with so little, for so long, that now I can do anything with nothing.

By thomasfarley01

Business writer and graphic arts gadfly.

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