If I Had More Time I Would Write You A Shorter Letter

The paragraph in quotes is entirely serviceable. Given time to edit, however, it can be more dynamic and easier to read.

In revising I cut the word count from 76 to 59. This takes it from the 12th grade level to the 9th. If you apply such revising to a page of paragraphs you will certainly quicken your writing. My revisions are in red:

“An offer in compromise is a program that enables you to resolve your tax debt for an amount less than what is owed through a lump sum or short term payment plan. Simply put, an OIC provides you the opportunity to pay a lower amount as your full and final payment, potentially saving you thousands of dollars in taxes, interest, and penalties. Note, however, that most taxpayers do not qualify for the offer in compromise program.”

An offer in compromise is a program

The offer in compromise program

that enables you to

may

resolve your tax debt for an amount less

resolve your tax debt for less

than what is owed through a lump sum or short term payment plan.

than what’s owed through a lump sum or short term payment plan.

Simply put, an OIC provides you the opportunity to

Simply put, an OIC lets you

pay a lower amount as your full and final payment,

pay less for your full and final payment,

potentially saving you thousands of dollars in taxes, interest, and penalties.

potentially saving you thousands in taxes, interest, and penalties.

Note, however, that most taxpayers do not qualify for the offer in compromise program.

Most taxpayers, however, do not qualify for the offer in compromise program.

Final revision:

The offer in compromise program may resolve your tax debt for less than what’s owed through a lump sum or short term payment plan. Simply put, an OIC lets you pay less for your full and final payment, potentially saving you thousands in taxes, interest, and penalties. Most taxpayers, however, do not qualify for the offer in compromise program.

If you had time you could consider a complete rewrite. Here’s how I write:

Try resolving your tax debt for less with the offer in compromise program. That’s compared to a lump sum or short term payment plan. You pay less with an OIC for your full and final payment. You could save thousands in taxes, interest and penalties. Unfortunately,  most taxpayers don’t qualify for the offer in compromise program.

(The paragraph is now at the 6th grade level. Which is a good thing.)

copyediting

 

 

 

About thomasfarley01

Freelance writer who specializes in history, technology, and human interest stories.
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